Feedback on my Descriptive Writing?

Eclipse · 08-29-2014, 10:01 AM

I'd like some feedback on a piece of work I did for my English GCSE.

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cr33pyguy · 08-29-2014, 12:45 PM

I like it, it awakens feelings, which is what it is supposed to do.

However, are these your views, or were you given a topic?

Eclipse · 08-29-2014, 12:50 PM

(08-29-2014, 12:45 PM)cr33pyguy Wrote: I like it, it awakens feelings, which is what it is supposed to do.

However, are these your views, or were you given a topic?

No topic was given, they said describe something. Yes, these are more or less my views, but I still go to school...

cr33pyguy · 08-29-2014, 10:06 PM

(08-29-2014, 12:50 PM)Eclipse Wrote: No topic was given, they said describe something. Yes, these are more or less my views, but I still go to school...

okay. I just wanted to know whether your views were actually so extreme (and why couldn't / shouldn't they be) or you just made it more extreme for it to be easier to be descriptive about.

Oni · 08-29-2014, 11:08 PM

Disregarding my opinion, I have to admit that it is really well written.

Feat · 08-30-2014, 03:04 AM

I love it. And I agree with your argument entirely.

Have you already turned it in?

Saikou · 08-30-2014, 03:35 AM

Although I don't completely agree with what is said here, this is excellent.

Eclipse · 08-30-2014, 06:32 AM

(08-29-2014, 10:06 PM)cr33pyguy Wrote: okay. I just wanted to know whether your views were actually so extreme (and why couldn't / shouldn't they be) or you just made it more extreme for it to be easier to be descriptive about.

Not quite as extreme but my views are more or less the same.

(08-30-2014, 03:04 AM)Feat Wrote: I love it. And I agree with your argument entirely.

Have you already turned it in?

No, I'm going to turn it in when I go back in September.

(08-30-2014, 03:35 AM)Saikou Wrote: Although I don't completely agree with what is said here, this is excellent.

Thank you. <3

(08-29-2014, 11:08 PM)Oni Wrote: Disregarding my opinion, I have to admit that it is really well written.

Thank you. <3

Wow, I appreciate the awesome feedback! I didn't think it warranted such a large applause.

Losi · 08-30-2014, 08:20 AM

Interesting read. I can't really say much other than that without my opinions expressed as well. I noticed that you put some time and effort into your writing.

Eclipse · 08-30-2014, 08:58 AM

(08-30-2014, 08:20 AM)Losi Wrote: Interesting read. I can't really say much other than that without my opinions expressed as well. I noticed that you put some time and effort into your writing.

Thank you, indeed it took a while. I'd love to hear your opinion!